Jessica's Peer Edit: The beginning sentence covers 4 of the 5w's. Eastview, 2010, Seniors, graduation. The questions left unanswered are why and how. These are answered in the second paragraph. There aren't any really specific times or anything but the phrase "nothing is set in stone yet". This paper could be improved by cutting down the miss spellings.
Peter's Peer Edit: The beginning sentence covers most of the details but in brief while the second sentence goes on to explain that it was the Eastview Frisbee team last weekend at the Hopkins Hustle. In the second and even third paragraph he goes on to explain what the tournament is and how it works. The only questions I have after reading the first part of his story is how the team feels they are doing during the season and their predictions for the rest of the season.
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