Aaron Stevens Review
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
The whole story could use more details it is just short. It is not that descriptive so more info would be nice.
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
More people maybe and I thought the lead was fine and thought it was good.
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Kind of you could tell it was about track but maybe more descriptive and for you to talk more.
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
I would like just to see more of a story but the interviews were good and I like what the people said.
Andrew Peters Review
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
You could go more into how the banks failed also more into the bailout.
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
Some news sources online also i think the lead is really good.
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Yes it is about the economy and the United States trying to improve ours.
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
Just a longer story from what you have it is good so just add more and it would be really good. I would like to see less spelling errors type it in word first or spell check it.